... it's a good college try. HOWEVER...
1. jump scares, done poorly, only work once and become annoying. These almost did.
2. too linear, too short, too watery.
3. learn the lesson of Scratches, Fatal Frame 2 (CB), Yume Nikki and War of the Worlds (1953) - the holy trinity of IMPLICATION + TENSION + BUILD UP makes for 99% of a good game. show it once in the wrong way and you're never scared again. I have played SO MANY of these. ;) please make more polished games in future, ones that truly illustrate what you re trying to accomplish here, whatever that is. you are doing very well, I think (me being only a well-seasoned gamer) and you can do better. ;) I can't wait to see what else you do!